Lamott points out some very interesting and highly relatable points to writing your first draft and the importance of going back to revise that initial work. In my experience of this first draft, it was definitely all over the place until I went back to try and piece together all of my ideas and themes within paragraphs.   For me it wasn’t necessarily a first “shitty draft” as it was just the first time actually putting text on paper. As I moved on in my paper and took breaks in between writing I was doing all of this piecing together and trying to fix a bulk of these problems. Now I’m beginning the “real” revision.

Strategy:

My goal for revisioning is to structure my essay a bit better. Some of my paragraphs are lengthy and could be separated, while other paragraphs are short and could be expanded upon. Overall, I would also like to add more analysis. I feel I have a lot now but could always use more to enhance the support evidence and strengthen my overarching argument.

The first step to doing this will be figuring out how I can break apart my paragraphs. Once this is done I’m in hopes that my essay will flow even better than it does now. As far as analyzing more, I will be going back to each quote I chose and my personal life experience and try to relate it back to not only the thesis but also the bigger picture of things. 

The most challenging part, although it is very general, will be to add more analysis. I feel as though I have a lot of analysis at the moment but I am hoping that once I go back and reread my essay I will see areas where I can add more or have new ideas flow into my head that I can add. 

If a challenge arises, I will try my best to resolve it on my own. If I cannot do this I will resort to having some of my friends read it that are also in ENG110 and see if they have any suggestions. If this does not work out, as a last resort, I will see our writing fellow, Emmy, in hopes she may be able to shed some light.